Tension By Revealing Writing Technique

As the story unfolds the increasing size of something or less extensive than it first appears is one tension technique.  The following example is an excerpt from my latest Thriller book.

On one of the turns she happened to glance up above the

tree line. In the sky there was a white disc object; red fiery

hollow rings started to come from it. Actually it seemed they

were coming closer, and were growing larger the closer they

got to her.

She turned a corner and the disc was covered by a mountain

ridge. That’s better she thought, I’ll bet Jay has never seen anything

like that. Wait until I tell him about it, I know he’s into

physics. What fun he’ll be so excited to know what is flying

just north of his city. She took another drink of white chocolate

mocha coffee.

Anna drove many miles as the curved highway 101 followed

the coastline. She rounded a curve to find herself in the strange

swirls of a misty fog bank. She saw light blue areas in the white

fog. Farther into the fog she slowed her car down.

Small water droplets began hitting her windshield from

the thick fog. She could see the fog droplets were rotating

in a light blue glow as they generated in mid-air just in front

of her car. The droplets were spiral spreading outward and

became smaller.

Anna realized her simple drive south had become a

white knuckle ride to stay on the highway, in almost stop

driving conditions.

Slow driving through the strange thick fog for over an hour,

brought her out into a thin mist that sparkled with gold sun

streaks. Anna felt a sweep of relief; finally she had navigated

out of the strange fog.

Somehow the air had changed from moist and cold to heat

with no transition. She turned her heater off while the outside

air heat increased reminding her of a desert in summer.

Ahead above the highway the sky looked anything but

normal. Earths blue sky had a green sparkle that swept over

and showered down through it.

Anna decided earth must have taken a near direct hit from a

gigantic solar flare. Even her cars radio had news stations that

were talking about the sun’s increased solar activity.

She hoped the high temperatures would return to normal

soon. The crescent shape flare rapidly swept in a point toward

the west, its heat effect and sparkling green had disappeared.

Anna didn’t expect the drive from Coos Bay, Oregon to

Crescent City, California to be unpleasant. She hadn’t realized

the weather would transform her trip into a terrifying series

of events.

Driving time passed quietly with nothing more out of the

ordinary. She was almost alone on the highway; she noticed

that few cars had driven past her. She turned the heater on

again; the open ocean air once again was still cool in the

late spring.

My Thriller book:  Secret Terror In Wavelengths, has a Techno element.  If interested it can be found on   http://www.amazon.com/Janett-Lee-Wawrzyniak/e/B005K55SMK  and purchased or ordered from over 25,000 booksellers worldwide.