Action
for characters can also describe the motions they use to get to their
goal. When possible act out the moves
for those motions yourself. Where
needed, the written details of sight, sound, smell and touch help make a
believable character. This can also help
your characters transition toward the next scene. The following are character examples in
action.
He
couldn’t call for help; it began to seem he wouldn’t likely be found. Realizing the threat Jay broke into an
unrestrained run up the street in his dress uniform.
It is
just possible; he thought there might be time to avoid the incoming craft and ran
toward the left cross street.
Jay was
forced to run toward the craft. He would
be able to get to the cross street; it gave a greater distance away, from the
crafts closing angle of approach.
Jay put
together his escape. He saw hedges
ahead; he would turn right along the tall hedges, up the next street and he
would be home. In a full run his knees
were waist level and legs stretching out.
He heard
the graveled pavement under his dress shoes crunch grinding loose rock. But not enough rock to slide him off
balance. If it did he knew he would get
up and keep running.
The neighbors
had heard him running and watched his approach.
To his right a group of neighbors stood looking out from there
porch. One of them with an overhead arm
motion toward Jay yelled, “Why are you running?”
Details
can make your story seem to be true.
Details are how we know what we know.
