Tuesday, January 14, 2014

Ways Readers Believe your Story

Action for characters can also describe the motions they use to get to their goal.  When possible act out the moves for those motions yourself.  Where needed, the written details of sight, sound, smell and touch help make a believable character.  This can also help your characters transition toward the next scene.  The following are character examples in action.

He couldn’t call for help; it began to seem he wouldn’t likely be found.  Realizing the threat Jay broke into an unrestrained run up the street in his dress uniform.

It is just possible; he thought there might be time to avoid the incoming craft and ran toward the left cross street.

Jay was forced to run toward the craft.  He would be able to get to the cross street; it gave a greater distance away, from the crafts closing angle of approach.

Jay put together his escape.  He saw hedges ahead; he would turn right along the tall hedges, up the next street and he would be home.  In a full run his knees were waist level and legs stretching out.

He heard the graveled pavement under his dress shoes crunch grinding loose rock.  But not enough rock to slide him off balance.  If it did he knew he would get up and keep running.

The neighbors had heard him running and watched his approach.  To his right a group of neighbors stood looking out from there porch.  One of them with an overhead arm motion toward Jay yelled, “Why are you running?”

Details can make your story seem to be true.  Details are how we know what we know.

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